Read the full story here Web Link posted Tuesday, May 5, 2020, 10:06 AM
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Woman's phone taken in Menlo Oaks strong-arm robbery
Original post made on May 5, 2020
Read the full story here Web Link posted Tuesday, May 5, 2020, 10:06 AM
Comments (8)
Posted by pearl
a resident of another community
on May 5, 2020 at 12:27 pm
a resident of another community
on May 5, 2020 at 12:27 pm
BAY CITY NEWS SERVICE:
You report, "The suspect allegedly punched a woman out for a walk in the back."
Was the woman "...out for a walk in the back"?
Or, "...out for a walk, in the back"?
Posted by Me Two Three Four
a resident of Portola Valley: Westridge
on May 5, 2020 at 12:41 pm
a resident of Portola Valley: Westridge
on May 5, 2020 at 12:41 pm
Recommend the following book to your writer —
Eats, Shoots & Leaves: The Zero Tolerance Approach to Punctuation
Posted by Sentence Structure
a resident of Menlo Park: South of Seminary/Vintage Oaks
on May 5, 2020 at 2:18 pm
a resident of Menlo Park: South of Seminary/Vintage Oaks
on May 5, 2020 at 2:18 pm
A correction has thankfully been made to this article. After I first read it I wondered if the victim was on a walk out in the back, as in her back yard or was she punched in the back after her walk. The commas did confuse the story but the rewrite gave the reporting new life.
Who or what is Bay City News?
By the way, I am distressed to hear that at 8:20PM on Arlington, one cannot take a walk without an incident that must have been terrifying. We are in store for some worrisome times ahead. The unemployment numbers means more crime. Brace yourself.
Posted by pearl
a resident of another community
on May 5, 2020 at 2:43 pm
a resident of another community
on May 5, 2020 at 2:43 pm
I just looked at the article (above) again; the Almanac is still using the original Bay City version, although I called the item to the attention of The Almanac editor a couple hours ago.
Bay City News Service: Web Link
Posted by More imporant point?
a resident of Menlo Park: Menlo Oaks
on May 6, 2020 at 9:15 am
a resident of Menlo Park: Menlo Oaks
on May 6, 2020 at 9:15 am
Disappointing that grammar seems to be the main concern in the comments. Thank you to "sentence structure" for addressing the more important issue.
Posted by pogo
a resident of Woodside: other
on May 7, 2020 at 7:46 am
a resident of Woodside: other
on May 7, 2020 at 7:46 am
To "More important point" ... Welcome to social media!
Posted by Randy Clunge
a resident of Menlo Park: The Willows
on May 7, 2020 at 11:36 am
a resident of Menlo Park: The Willows
on May 7, 2020 at 11:36 am
Well, that's close to home as often walk from my home around the Menlo Oaks area to the Menlo Atherton track.
Sometimes I'm accompanied with my niece and I have to tell her, "the difference with men and women is their knack for spatial awareness" - she usually has her head in her phone and rarely sees the folks who walk by us - just to say hi, be neighborly.
I hope this lady recovers, and they get this fella for what he's done.
I dont blame unemployment on a phone theft and assault, it's a rotten kid who needs a good lesson on respect
Posted by pearl
a resident of another community
on May 7, 2020 at 11:56 am
a resident of another community
on May 7, 2020 at 11:56 am
To: More important point?
"Disappointing that grammar seems to be the main concern in the comments."
No, I felt the sentence, as constructed, did not reflect the gravity of the crime, based on my experience working in law enforcement for many years.
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